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Two papers still to write,
Twelve-inch snowy Christmas shows
And a party every night.

The town has come alight;
It’s luring us away from those
Two papers still to write.

All our financial plight
Intensified by shop windows,
And a party every night.

We’re chilling out despite
That scary way the time just goes -
Two papers still to write.

But still we take delight
In letting all those set texts close,
And a party every night.

Next year seems far off, out of sight,
But deadlines loom, and no one knows.
Two papers still to write,
And a party every night.
©2007-2009 *ThornyEnglishRose
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Author's Comments

:santa: :rudolph: For the Litmas poetry contest. :rudolph: :santa:

So, let me remind you of the competition guidelines, and take you through my thought process… should you be interested.

Holiday landscape:
If you take the most obvious definition of ‘landscape’, the one I get this time of year is pretty dull: grey, with a few leftover autumn leaves and feeble drizzly rain a fair amount of the time. But that’s not a very good poem, is it? But according to the dictionary in my word processor, landscape can simply mean ‘general situation of activity: the general situation providing the background to a particular type of activity’.* So that covers a multitude of sins, really, doesn’t it? :D

*Encarta ® World English Dictionary © & (P) 1998-2004 Microsoft Corporation. All rights reserved.

Cultural customs:
Have you ever applied to a college or university that boasts ‘ethnic diversity’? Students come from all kinds of backgrounds and cultures, and yet when they come together they create a brand new culture all their own. We students are often stereotyped as layabouts and partygoers, sometimes unjustly, but for most of us December is not one of those sometimes. This poem is fairly general in terms of wider culture and customs, although I do mention ‘Christmas’ once. It’s only that all the holiday specials I’ve ever seen are either mostly or wholly about Christmas; I think statistically it’s what you’re most likely to see if you turn on your (snowy-pictured twelve-inch) TV this time of year.

Fixed form:
Villanelle. Not my best form by any means. Actually, this is only the second villanelle I’ve ever written in my life. It’s so hard, which makes one inclined to think it might not have been the best idea for a contest entry - but this time, as a matter of fact, it wasn’t as hard as all that. Those refrains came to me straight off, as the repetitive form seemed appropriate to the average student’s circular way of thinking: Oh, I’ve got those essays to write… but it’s holidays… but I’ve got those essays to write… but it’s holidays - and so forth. (It’s… not just me, is it? :paranoid:)

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:icontwilights-maiden:
nice Villanelle - they are not easy, and I love how yours flows so well and fits the theme so well - none of the lines seem forced at all which is what I had trouble with in my pantoum.

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Beauty is nothing but the first touch of terror we're just able to endure. ~ Rilke
:iconthornyenglishrose:
I'm so glad none of the lines seem forced. I worked very hard trying to make it flow well, and even if only you think it does, it was worth it. Thank you. :hug:
:icontwilights-maiden:
I've only done a few Villanelles (and it has been a few years since I've done any) I like the form, but they are tricky. I really need to get back into working with fixed forms, I really enjoy them.

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Beauty is nothing but the first touch of terror we're just able to endure. ~ Rilke
:iconguardianomega:
I agree with the last one. It's much better than I could do considering the fixed form...I'm not very good with fixed poetic form...anyway. It has a remarkable rhythm, and the stanzas fit together well without any single piece taking center stage. Quite a remarkable little package...and something that, amusingly, a lot of people could relate to in some form or another.

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~Omega (Defiance)

I can't not be by Her side. I have woven my very heart to hers...and now I feel nothing but her waiting, nothing but her sorrow...and I wish so much to only feel her smile...
:iconfledgist:
Very nice villanelle.

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As we grow older, we do not get any younger.
:iconchaokitty:
Very nice! Exactly how I'm feeling, too!

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Not EVUHN.
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:iconthornyenglishrose:
Thanks - I'm glad you like it. :thanks:

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