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Inside Every Fat Woman by *ThornyEnglishRose:iconThornyEnglishRose:



And one day there was a mass breakout of thin women.

In shops, on street corners,
Yes it was hard work, but no pain no gain.
Skirts were shorter, tops were tighter,
Nights were longer, voices were louder,
Men were shallower, but more frequent.
Confident?  Yes, but

What had they done with my fat friends?
These weren’t the same women.
They talked of my friends as jailers,
Jailers who were fat, and nothing else, keeping them at bay.
My friends were never smug,
They were never loud or abrasive,
They didn’t believe that looks were all and,
Most important, they never put me down.

A couple of months of rigid dieting will soon put you right.
You know what they say:
Inside every fat woman is a thin woman trying to get out.


Their most attractive features
(Their hearts, their souls, their loyalty) had gone, and yet
They were better liked, by some.

I can’t believe one of those skinny bitches is trying to get out of me.
I’m fat, and good, and kind, and sincere, and I don’t believe
There’s any other woman inside me,
Any better body, or anybody better.
©2007-2010 *ThornyEnglishRose
:iconthornyenglishrose:

Author's Comments

This isn’t about anybody or anything in particular. It is not intended to be a slur on anyone. It is simply my entry into the poetry category of :iconmeadowcress:’s cliché contest. The cliché, obviously: Inside every fat woman there’s a thin woman trying to get out.

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:iconmuse21:
Have you ever watched"phat girls"? This reminds me of it. The flow of this is just lovely.

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“Writing is like prostitution. First you do it for love, and then for a few close friends, and finally for money.”
:iconvix0r:
AWESOME last line. Holy shit. :clap: :wow:

The piece as a whole ain't shabby, neither. ;p

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Be inspired: *simplypoetry and *simplyprose.
:iconshowna:
I agree about the last line, well done.

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Showna was here.
:pride::pointr:don't thank me, comment on my art:pointl::pride:
:iconthornyenglishrose:
Never have. I'll keep my eyes open for it. Thanks for the kind words. :)
:iconthornyenglishrose:
Lol, thanks. I kinda like that last line myself, actually. It came to me all in a flash, just when I was wondering how to finish up the poem. God I'm good. ;P
:iconvix0r:
Sounds like you have a generous muse! ;p

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Be inspired: *simplypoetry and *simplyprose.
:iconfriskyryski:
I'm also a fan of that last line, but the whole thing is pretty good.

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Rykki
:iconbatousaijin:
you sure are and you know it!! :D amazing iconoclast of that horrible saying. you've got the issue and the problem out in the open. "if you're willing to give up a part of your soul, you can gain fame and recognition of this world," or something like that.

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