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And one day there was a mass breakout of thin women.

In shops, on street corners,
Yes it was hard work, but no pain no gain.
Skirts were shorter, tops were tighter,
Nights were longer, voices were louder,
Men were shallower, but more frequent.
Confident?  Yes, but

What had they done with my fat friends?
These weren’t the same women.
They talked of my friends as jailers,
Jailers who were fat, and nothing else, keeping them at bay.
My friends were never smug,
They were never loud or abrasive,
They didn’t believe that looks were all and,
Most important, they never put me down.

A couple of months of rigid dieting will soon put you right.
You know what they say:
Inside every fat woman is a thin woman trying to get out.


Their most attractive features
(Their hearts, their souls, their loyalty) had gone, and yet
They were better liked, by some.

I can’t believe one of those skinny bitches is trying to get out of me.
I’m fat, and good, and kind, and sincere, and I don’t believe
There’s any other woman inside me,
Any better body, or anybody better.
©2007-2010 *ThornyEnglishRose
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Author's Comments

This isn’t about anybody or anything in particular. It is not intended to be a slur on anyone. It is simply my entry into the poetry category of :iconmeadowcress:’s cliché contest. The cliché, obviously: Inside every fat woman there’s a thin woman trying to get out.

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"'Never imagine yourself not to be otherwise than what it might appear to others that what you were or might have been was not otherwise than what you had been would have appeared to them to be otherwise.'"
---The Duchess.
:iconmintypoki:
i enjoy this a lot!! its EPIC kool beans 2 ya

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:iconmintypoki:
yr welcome ^^

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My icon was made by cremecake
:iconff7aangel:
:( this is a heartbreaking poem, for i know it is happening in the world. With the stress on Tv, model shows and videoclips... How many times haveyou turned on the tv to a music channel to see a skinny woman wearing next to nothing with so much makeup it probably weighs more than her bbody weight put together. I think the skinny women insidde eryone is just a demon of jealously and hatred and envy and longing to be wanted and loved. Butsome of the mnany men that pick them up just want to feel them up, but a lot do not. I feel at an advantage for a i am very large girl, so i feel i will never pick up a guy who just wants my body. And i have a boyfriend now who is beautiful inside and out and also likes me for ME.
Big girls, you are are beautiful. Keep on rocking the world cause who else is gonna do it?
Cause without us big girls, the skinny ones just arent skinny.
:hug: i lve this and hope you dont mind me linking it to a journal im going to write? :heart: keep on rockin girl and dont you ever give in to the demon inside.

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With your heart, can you take me
With your heart, can you break me
With your heart, can you forsake me,
With your heart can you make me.
The world is going crazy, so the more insane you are, the easier it is.
Stereotypes are stupid.
:iconthornyenglishrose:
I'm glad to have made such an impression on you. Please, feature the poem to your heart's content!

It's kind of beside the point, and maybe even undermines it a little, but I must remind you that there are men who like big women for their bodies.
:iconff7aangel:
yer i know :) actually, 70% of men do like big women :) how cool is that? lol thankyou so much for writing this poem!

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With your heart, can you take me
With your heart, can you break me
With your heart, can you forsake me,
With your heart can you make me.
The world is going crazy, so the more insane you are, the easier it is.
Stereotypes are stupid.
:iconyhigte:
Obviously the first and last lines are brilliant, but my favorite line is actually "Confident? Yes, but" for its subtlety and because, in my experience, confidence almost always does have a horrible flip-side.

As for the story as a whole, it's cleverly written and incredibly fresh -- your narrator is accepting of herself without being whiny or holier-than-thou (well, maybe a little holier-than-thou, but appropriately so given her situation). You speak with dignity and unvarnished honesty instead of the hollow self-righteousness often found when someone with less talent attempts the same sort of story. So awesome.
:iconthornyenglishrose:
Thanks, I'm glad to have avoided so many pitfalls! ^^;
:iconyhigte:
Oh yeah, it's not easy turning rant mode off when you write about things that piss you off. I admire how well you succeeded.

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