A small, domestic bathroom. TIM, a young and unimposing man, is unconscious on the floor, leaning against the bath, hands and wrists tied, a bloody wound on his forehead. He starts to wake up, looks around, and then realises his predicament.
TIM
Hey! (Pause.) Heeeeeeey!
The door opens. KAREN, a young woman, enters. She has a necklace in her hand, which she clutches throughout the scene. She looks at TIM, aggressive and defiant.
KAREN
Yes?
TIM
You shouldnt have done that. It was really dangerous.
KAREN
Ive called the police.
TIM
I thought you probably had. I mean, youve got me now. But I just wanted to say
next time, I wouldnt tackle them like that. You might not have been so lucky.
KAREN
Right, because youre so tough. Anyway, I wasnt being rash. Ive been taking a class.
TIM
In what - knocking people out?
KAREN
No, self-defence.
TIM
That wasnt self-defence.
KAREN
Yeah, but if youd turned round and started attacking me, Id have known what to do, wouldnt I?
TIM
Not necessarily. I might have been stronger than I looked. (KAREN turns to go.) I might have been army trained. (He calls after her.) You dont know me!
KAREN
(Returning.) Look, Im not doing this, all right? I know enough. I know you were trying to climb out of my bathroom window with all my money and stuff.
TIM
Dont you want to know why?
KAREN
Why! I dont care why! Your problems are your problems.
TIM
Oh, thats nice, isnt it? Yknow, thats the problem with society these days.
KAREN
Im the problem with society?
TIM
Not you. That attitude. If there was a bit more help available for people with my problems
KAREN
(Sighs.) Come on then. (She lowers the lid of the toilet seat and sits on it.) Tell me.
TIM
You dont care.
KAREN
I might. You dont know me either.
TIM
All right. My names Tim, by the way. (A pause while he waits for her to answer.) Well, obviously Im unemployed. And Im in a lot of debt. And theyve threatened to -
KAREN
How old are you?
TIM
What?
KAREN
How old are you? You dont look old enough to have got into a lot of debt.
TIM
It was my mother. She got into financial trouble after my dad died. She drank a lot, until eventually the drink killed her. All Ive got left is a dilapidated two-bed bungalow, and if I cant get some money together Im going to lose that too.
KAREN
Right, so you decide to rob me. This crappy little place is where you think you can get enough money to start again.
TIM
It was an opportunity. You left a window open.
KAREN
I bet there are windows open all over town. Youd do better to go three miles up the road and look for an open window there. Do you know what the rent for this place is?
TIM
No.
KAREN
You cant break into my home and then claim the moral high ground because Im judging you. Shouldnt it work both ways? You dont know who youre robbing. Do you ever think about that? I cant afford to be robbed!
TIM
Youve got a lot more than I have.
KAREN
Oh, really?
TIM
You dont believe me.
KAREN
Youre just trying to get me to untie you.
TIM
Its all true.
KAREN
All right, if its really like that, theyll be lenient with you.
TIM
You really think we live in that kind of a world, Karen?
KAREN
How do you know my name?
TIM
I went through some of your stuff. I know it was yours. You live alone, dont you?
KAREN
(Stands up and goes to the window.) Where the hell are they?
TIM
Did you tell them you had me tied up?
KAREN
Yeah. Maybe Ill call them back and tell them youve broken free. Im hiding in the wardrobe, and youre stalking me with a machete as I speak.
TIM
Do you like those kinds of movies?
KAREN
My saying you didnt know me wasnt an invitation for you to get to know me. (A long pause. She starts to leave, then stops in the doorway.) Ach! Typical.
TIM
What?
KAREN
You have a thief tied up in your bathroom, and then you need to pee.
TIM
I wont look.
KAREN
Why should I believe that?
TIM
Wow. Its worse than I thought.
KAREN
What?
TIM
Your trust issues.
KAREN
(Gapes.) My trust
? Well, yes, I do have a few trust issues with people I find robbing my home!
TIM
I think its more than that. A trusting person would have believed my story. And what about the self-defence classes? You dont trust the people who pass you on the street.
KAREN
Im a young woman living on my own, and I dont want to take a chance! Im not just assuming Im going to get attacked. Anyway, I did, didnt I?
TIM
I wouldnt have tried to hurt you. That isnt me.
KAREN
No, of course not. You obviously have a very clear moral code, Robin Hood.
TIM
Karen, come on. Im really not a bad guy. And you were right - I didnt think about the person I was robbing. (Pause.) What about that necklace?
KAREN
What necklace?
TIM
The one in your hand. It obviously means something to you.
KAREN
Thats none of your business. (Pause.) All right. Yes, its important to me. My grandmother gave it to me on my eighteenth birthday.
TIM
Shes dead, then?
KAREN
Why assume that? Youre not very good at this, are you? Even if shes not dead, I still love her. And she will be dead one day, wont she? And when that happens, Id wish I had the necklace then, wouldnt I, if youd stolen it? (Pause.) If shes not dead already.
TIM
It should have occurred to me that your jewellery might have sentimental value. Im sorry I tried to steal it.
KAREN
(Holding up the necklace.) Just this? Arent you sorry you tried to rob me in the first place? Or do you still think I should pay for societys shortcomings?
TIM
You do believe me, then?
KAREN
It doesnt matter whether youre telling the truth or not. You still tried to rob me, and Im still going to hand you over to the police.
TIM
So thats it - you dont care at all? You get by on a badly paid job and a place with cheap rent, and thats all that matters to you. To hell with everybody else, right?
KAREN
You were robbing me!
TIM
If youd heard my story from someone else - on the news, say - and I hadnt tried to rob you
would you care then?
KAREN
Shut up! You dont know me! You dont know anything about me!
TIM
I know you loved your grandmother. Thats all youll tell me.
KAREN
Why would I tell a stranger anything?
TIM
See what I mean? Trust issues.
A long pause, broken by the sound of sirens. KAREN looks at the window, then turns and heads for the door.
TIM
Karen, wait! (Pause. She waits expectantly.) Are you really going to let them have me? After everything Ive said?
KAREN
I knew you were lying.
She leaves the room, slamming the door behind her.















Critiques
While the minimal use of stage directions may be an issue, film makers should have a splendid time taking this masterpiece through the process of creative freedom. The lines, in my opinion, were created with the utmost skill and careful planning. If they weren't, however, I can tell this writer has serious skill and talent.
Personally, I felt a new light dawn on me as I completed this short tale, and I hope the rest her readers feel the same as I have.
Best regards, Soyaku Jinjashi
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