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                                                                                                             But why?



The angry girl never had any reason
to squeeze the t
                              e
                                 a
                                    r
                                     s from her eyes and
scream until she felt her throat would tear
other than that
she felt like it.

So she did it anyway.

And didn’t try to make sense of it.




Not so the angry woman.


Little
                                                                                       invisible
things

drag along her teeth
and scrape the surface of her brain

but instead of screaming and crying
now she says
There’s no reason for it…




                                                                       But that doesn’t mean
                                                                                                                it isn’t there.





So she shuts herself                                                                                  away
from the people who don’t deserve
the white-hot
                                                 s                       r                     y
                                                                           p                   a

from the eruption of her rage


and she tries to talk it out of her with reasoning,
and to l
             e
               a
                 k it out of her fingertips,
and to blow it                                                                  away with feigned indifference…


But

she’s not going to scream and cry
this time
because

there’s no reason to,
and it’s not how civilised people behave,
and she can’t justify it,

she’ll just become even angrier as she sits in
angry
                                                                                                                silence
and
reflects on the norms of society holding her inside her own skin
and wonders,




Why the hell shouldn’t she?
At the very least it helped.

A little.
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seRa-casSie Featured By Owner May 15, 2010
i read this out loud to myself and i love it sooo much :love: :tighthug:
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ThornyEnglishRose Featured By Owner May 15, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Great, thanks! :D
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gabrielka Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2007
I' ve heard that grils should B quiet

but no one can live without showing emotion :)
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Muse21 Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2007
I'm not sure what you have done is called so I shall call it powerful and moving. It's quite like markers on a side walk, hard to see, but with time and talent can be beautiful.
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ThornyEnglishRose Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2007  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :blush:
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DemonRei Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2007
I really like the way this flows, as well as the spacing of words.

I wish I could say something a little more specific, but I'm hung up on the whole peice.
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ThornyEnglishRose Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2007  Hobbyist Writer
You are? Great. :hug:
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vix0r Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2007
Pretty angry and a little scary, but powerful and quite good. Sorry I'm so late in getting to it. ^^;
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ThornyEnglishRose Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2007  Hobbyist Writer
Scary? Me?

RARRH!
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vix0r Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2007
:ohnoes:
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Dusk1983 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2007
Wow. Its funny you should write this about a seething rage that never gets settled because 'thats not what we do'. A friend and I were speaking the other day about how much we FEAR the wrath of women. Simply because if a guy is somehow wronged, theres an explosion of rage, then the making up and stuff, but with ze womens, we fear THEY NEVER FORGET. The same incident is turned over again and again in their minds feeding on itself and never forgotten, and never truly forgiven. Ze Wominz is scary.

This is a random comment. Have a nice day. :)
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ThornyEnglishRose Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2007  Hobbyist Writer
That depends on the individual woman - very few of us actually conform to stereotype.
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Dusk1983 Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2007
oh i was talking from my personal experiences not stereotypes. But perhaps, the women Ive met have all been weird abberrations. I wouldnt put it past my luck. =p
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critical-condition Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2007   Writer
Poem is powerful, and layout is certainly very different. But I really like it. And the mix of bold and un-bold font :) well done, but if it was you that was angry, I hope it gets resolved :)
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ThornyEnglishRose Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2007  Hobbyist Writer
I was angry, but there was nothing to resolve - there was absolutely no reason for it. It was really weird, but I seem to be over it now.

Thank you for your comments. :hug:
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critical-condition Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2007   Writer
:hug: Hope all is going well...and if you're on easter hols, hope they're fun :)
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CynicalRomantic Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2007
I love the form, especially as the structure becomes more regular toward the end, it's like the narrator is gathering their thoughts. It gives the final line real impact.
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ThornyEnglishRose Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2007  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :aww:
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Fledgist Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2007  Hobbyist Writer
This has a lot of emotion behind it. I'm glad it helped. You might find some Brazilian concrete poetry interesting.
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Silica-Streak Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2007
So long as it helped, it was worth it.
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TheTwelve Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2007
I love the form here, great work!
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ThornyEnglishRose Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2007  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :)
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Umbrav Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2007
Pretty powerful stuff. It left me pretty wide eyed.

I like it. *clicks the fav button*
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ThornyEnglishRose Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2007  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :hug:
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Nautical-Nieky Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2007   General Artist
Very emotionally loaded... very powerful :cling:
And the visual effects have been done really well... on both the effect itself, visually as its sense in the poem.
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ThornyEnglishRose Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2007  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks very much. :hug:
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Nautical-Nieky Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2007   General Artist
You're very welcome :cuddle:
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